The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The bar chart illustrates what the favorable things are spent by consumer in four major countries. There are personal stereos, tennis racquets, perfumes, CDs, toys and photographic film.
First, the prominent feature is base on data which photographic film the most thing was bought by Britain, while tennis racquet was the lowest in France. The larger shopper in each stuffs were Britain than Germany, France and Italy.
More than 170,000 pounds sterling was prepared to purchase for photograpic films by Britain. Then, tennis racquets were average 144 thousand pounds sterling available by France. Also, France consumer was lower to buy personal stereos and perfumes than shopping CDs, toys and photograpic films.
Whereas, Germany shopper preferred shopping personal stereos, tennis racquets and perfumes. France and Germany had similarities for spending personal stereos which was nearly 150,000 pounds sterling. Likewise, for toys where Italy and France had coextensive at 159,000 pounds sterling. Next, shopper in Italy focussed to buy photograpic film, toys and Cds than purchasing others.
the prominent feature is base on data
the prominent feature is based on data
Sentence: The larger shopper in each stuffs were Britain than Germany, France and Italy.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to each and stuffs
France consumer was lower to buy personal stereos and perfumes than shopping CDs, toys and photograpic films.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
for spending personal stereos which was nearly
for spending personal stereos which were nearly
Sentence: Then, tennis racquets were average 144 thousand pounds sterling available by France.
Description: The fragment were average 144 is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace average with adverb
Sentence: More than 170,000 pounds sterling was prepared to purchase for photograpic films by Britain.
Error: photograpic Suggestion: photographic
Sentence: Also, France consumer was lower to buy personal stereos and perfumes than shopping CDs, toys and photograpic films.
Error: photograpic Suggestion: photographic
Sentence: Next, shopper in Italy focussed to buy photograpic film, toys and Cds than purchasing others.
Error: photograpic Suggestion: photographic
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 165 200
No. of Characters: 903 1000
No. of Different Words: 88 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.584 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.473 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.453 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 79 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 58 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.977 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.637 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4