The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make co

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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the data about differences and diversities in average a family's home cost in variety of countries in 1990 and after 12 years compared with average home cost in 1989.

In the first half decade, the proportion of the UK is the same as Japan, approximately -7.5%, and also is the smallest. However, New York is -5% and smaller than Madrid, whereas the Germany is in the highest and the greatest. Therefore, London and Japan were affluent and well-off in 1990. Nevertheless, the estimation of London rockets considerably, and unexpectedly. At a glance, between 1996-2002, it is noticeable that Tokyo remains constant, and a big discrepancy is not seen. Despite, New York doubles significantly, while at the same time, Madrid increases steadily, and the Frankfurt decreases gradually.

In conclusion, there is a substantial growth in London, Madrid, New York, but the others drop spontaneously which means UK spends a lot than the others. In addition, it has to be noted down that the little price was spent by Germany

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