The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Ages and Genders in USA.
The bar charts elucidate the information about the number of heart attacks occurred in USA within three age groups; 29-44, 45-64 and over 65 and by its gender. The units are measured in thousands.
It is apparent that the number of heart attacks increases as the US citizen's age increases. Interestingly, there was higher number of heart attacks for men than those for women.
People with over 65 years old of age are likely to have heart attacks than those for younger people. Within this group, men recorded a higher number of heart attacks of 440 than those of women (374). The lowest number of heart attacks was reported for USA citizens with 29 to 44 years of age. 123 males experienced heart attacks while only 3 females were having heart attacks as it is recorded for the lowest heart attacks. The number of people with age of between 45 and 65, also experienced lower heart attacks of 424 and 136 for males and females, respectively.
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The number of people with age of between 45 and 65, also experienced lower heart attacks of 424 and 136 for males and females....
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