The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000
The particular figure supplied below demonstrates the information concerning proportion of parcels by two big mail services companies over an eighty-year period (to be exact from 1920 to 2000).It is apparent from to graph with a glance that even though TNT standed at low degree in the beginning, the company showed higher result than FedEx in evolution.
In contrast to FedEx ,TNT is larger by a medium margin .FedEx tremendously boomed and peaked (24000) beginning from 15000 whilst TNT expressed solely minimum increase over a twenty-year period . FedEx abruptly dived to 12000.However, TNT demonstrated the same trend as in the first quarter . In 1960, both FedEx and TNT stood at virtually the a same rate . The company of FedEx grew rapidly in the third and fourth quarter, reaching a level of about 17000 . Since then it has remained more or less stable.TNT depicted that the degree delivered mails were more static in the third twenty-year period (in particular starting in 1960 and ending in 1980 ).Interestingly, this company swiftly soared in the last quarter (25000).
Overall, FedEx transported mails flactuatingly, but TNT only grew during 80 year.
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Sentence: In 1960, both FedEx and TNT stood at virtually the a same rate .
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Sentence: The particular figure supplied below demonstrates the information concerning proportion of parcels by two big mail services companies over an eighty-year period to be exact from 1920 to 2000.It is apparent from to graph with a glance that even though TNT standed at low degree in the beginning, the company showed higher result than FedEx in evolution.
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Sentence: Overall, FedEx transported mails flactuatingly, but TNT only grew during 80 year.
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