the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the picture above depicts the consumption of fish and multifarious of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004 where that time around 25 years ago. there are kinds of meat which beef and lamb declined generally, however for the chicken went up numerous people consumption it per week until 2004.
in the first years was 1979, beef was popular where people ordered beef more than 200 grams per week and around 150 grams for the lamb was. then, lamb and beef decreased slightly. whereas, chicken started from an amount more or less 150 grams per person per week.
in spite of that for the chicken rose steadily until 2004 where it was most popular because increasing around 100 grams per week. on the contrary, for the lamb and beef sharped down until 100 grams consumption by citizen that were not interested by people. on the other hand, people consumption fish remained constant started from 1979 until 2004, it means there are some people loyalty to eat fish and were called seafood lover.
between 1979 and 2004 where that time around 25 years ago.
between 1979 and 2004 in a period of 25 years.
however for the chicken went up numerous people consumption it per week until 2004.
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in the first years was 1979,
in the first year 1979,
because increasing around 100 grams per week.
because it is increasing to 100 grams per week.
there are some people loyalty to eat fish and were called seafood lover.
there are some people loyal to eat fish and were called seafood lover.
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