IELTS TASK 1 - plan to build new supermarket in the city of Garlsdon.
Question:
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The map below shows town of Garlsdon where has population 65,000. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town.
In general, site plan establishing supermarket (S2) more possible than choice site shop store (S1).
The first possible area for the supermarket (S1) is riveting where it has several cities consist of 25 km to Cransdon has population as big as 29,000 people, and 16 km to Brandsdon consist of population 15,000 persons. Therefore, if many persons in around build of supermarket, I think they will come many benefits for it because many people need some food, dress or others for their family. With the result, they will visit supermarket for buying it. Then, they will choose place which is nearer because some people in around there work in the office industry and they just have a little time. Furthermore, they have not opportunity to go place far distance. However, S1 has fewer society in around that it is consist of 10,000 society of 12 km to Hindon.
In short, Carlsdon has opportunity for building supermarket in the town center. It is place strategy place for many people in around.
The map below shows town of Garlsdon where has population
The map below shows the town of Garlsdon where it has population
site plan establishing supermarket (S2) more possible than choice site shop store (S1).
site plan establishing supermarket (S2) is more possible than the site shop store (S1).
Sentence: The first possible area for the supermarket S1 is riveting where it has several cities consist of 25 km to Cransdon has population as big as 29,000 people, and 16 km to Brandsdon consist of population 15,000 persons.
Description: The fragment Brandsdon consist of is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace consist with verb, past tense
Sentence: Furthermore, they have not opportunity to go place far distance.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to place and far
Sentence: However, S1 has fewer society in around that it is consist of 10,000 society of 12 km to Hindon.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and consist
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
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Score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 190 200
No. of Characters: 885 1000
No. of Different Words: 110 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.713 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.658 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.537 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 63 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 39 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 26 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.273 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.391 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4