The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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A glance at the table reveals the information of consumer expenditure on different goods in 5 countries in 2002, namely Ireland, Italy, spain, sweden and turkey.
It is evident from the information provided that the item of Food/drinks/tobacco made up the largest proportion in most of the countries, followed by Clothing/footwear and leasure/education respectively
To be more specific, Turkey and Ireland were the two nations which had by far the highest budged went on Food/drinks/tobacco, with 32,14% for the former and 28.91% for the later. The figure for this item in Spain stood at moderate level, with 18.80%, however Leasure and Education were less enjoyed in this nation with merely 1/98%
By stark contrast, accounting for 5.4% spending on Clothing and footwear, the number in Sweden was just 15.77% in Food/Drink/tobacco which lower than any other countries named. Italy shared the same pattern in term of Clothing/Foodwear when this figure was 9% of the consumer spending.
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1. accounting for = being:
1. accounting for = being: the number not use with account for: the budget for food and... account for...
2. later = latter
3. when = while or as (the last paragraph)
4. paragraph 1: good should be replaced by good and services
5. in term of = in terms of
6. the same pattern = a simillar pattern
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Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 10
No. of Words: 166 200
No. of Characters: 795 1000
No. of Different Words: 107 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.589 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.789 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.409 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 58 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 42 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 12 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.607 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.167 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.457 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.813 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4