technology usage proportion in the UK
The graph illustrates the proportion of four different types of domestic access in every home in the UK over the period between 1996 and 2003. The general overview here is that, among all the accesses CD player was the most important device in homes in the UK and the least one is internet.
To specify, in 1996 the CD player was highest in proportion in the homes of UK with 60% and gradually increased in the following years and reached to 81% in 2003. Home Computer stands in the second place with 28% in 1996 and slightly increased to 55% at the end of 2003.
In the other hand, Cell Phones place in the last but one position with 19% in the year 1996 and slightly increased until 1999 and remained stable in between 1999 and 2000 with over 40%. There was a drastic improvement over the period of 2000 to 2003 with 70% remained finally in 2003. Till the end of 1998 there was no internet access in the homes in UK. In 1999 only 10% of homes in the UK was provided with Internet and rapid increment takes place to nearly 45% in 2003.
In conclusion, CD player was the highest usage in the homes in UK with over 80% and internet places last with 45%.
Cell Phones place in the last but one position with 19% in the year 1996 and slightly increased until 1999 and remained stable in between 1999 and 2000 with over 40%.
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rapid increment takes place to nearly 45% in 2003.
rapid increment took place to nearly 45% in 2003.
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
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Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 218 200
No. of Characters: 908 1000
No. of Different Words: 100 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.843 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.165 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.222 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 50 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 36 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 13 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.94 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.483 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.696 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4