While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter explain
- what happened
- apologize for the accident
- tell your friend what you plan to do about the bowl.
Dear Jim,
I am writing to express my sadness over a minor incident that took place in your apartment when I was staying there. I broke an expensive bowl that was placed on a table in the lounge. It was purely an accident.
Actually, when I was speaking over the phone I did not notice the bowl on the table, since it was placed behind a thick book. When I turned suddenly, the table was near my foot, which by mistake got knocked down and made the bowl to fall over and break. I deeply regret about this incident. I have searched for a similar type of bowl from the Ebay website and have ordered it. It will be delivered within a week. I have also given the broken bowl to the nearest shop to see if they can fix it. Once again I am so sorry about this. I hope you could understand. Looking forward for your reply.
Best regards,
Santhosh
flaws:
It is not clear:
'When I turned suddenly, the table was near my foot, which by mistake got knocked down and made the bowl to fall over and break.'
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