Write a letter to an employment agency about your interest in working in another country. Please mention
- What kind of job would you like to have?
- In what industry do you want to work? Why?
- Why do you want to work in another country?
Dear Sir / Madam,
I'm writing this letter to apply for a position as a IT Public Relationship Executive with your XYS agency in London.
First of all,I have vast working experience in Information Technology Sector. In total, I have almost 13 years of clean record in handling Business Partners queries. At the same time, I have been a focal point of contact in operational area with maintaining excellent relationship.
Secondly, Since I am applying this job in London I am keen to embark in the same industry with same kind of job, so that I wont have to struggle when I start a new job in different organization. Thou, it will be a new working environment, I will surely adapt to the changes at this area.
Lastly, the reason I am applying this job is because I have just got my Permanent Resident status from The United Kingdom. It was always my dream to move there and furthermore, my wife's relatives who also resided in London wants us to move with them.
Looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours Faithfully,
XXXXXXXXX
my wife's relatives who also resided in London wants us to move with them.
my wife's relatives who also resided in London want us to move with them.
flaws:
Need to polish sentences. Most of sentences start by subject 'I'.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 184 200
No. of Characters: 824 1000
No. of Different Words: 122 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.683 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.478 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.678 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 56 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 39 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.037 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.8 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4