you have a friend who lives in a city abroad.you have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city.write to your friend explaining what you would like to do.tell him/her what type of work or studies you have been doing for the pastfew years and ask for assistance in contacting an appropriate institution.
Dear mr.Brown
I am sorry before if i have disturbed you. how are you? i hope you are okay.long time ago i never saw you again. i would like to take a course in UNEF of university but i still do not know about condition in there. so could you tell me about that and what i would like to do. because i know that you have long time ago stayed there and i am sure you know more about university. although i have studied here but i think the methods are different with my college. in my college was more discipline than the other college.because there were many incident in that college such as come late and sleepy when the lecturers teach them. i want to continue in UNEF of university. because almost the people who graduate from there are so easy to get a job. And i hope you could help me to contact that constitution whether that university is really good or not for me.Because i am afraid if i come to that university in fact what i have heard from the other people are wrong. i write this letter because you know more about that and please reply my letter. thank you.
your friend
KUSTAM
in my college was more discipline than the other college
my college was more disciplined than other colleges
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 5 10
No. of Words: 211 200
No. of Characters: 866 1000
No. of Different Words: 112 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.811 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.104 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.293 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 28 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 17 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 13 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 36.712 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.448 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.827 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.231 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4