1. The pie charts compare the percentage of the students in a university in the UK, apart from English language, they can speak other languages in two year, 2000 and 2010. It is clear from the charts that the rate of UK’s students only speaking Spanis

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1.
The pie charts compare the percentage of the students in a university in the UK, apart from English language, they can speak other languages in two year, 2000 and 2010.
It is clear from the charts that the rate of UK’s students only speaking Spanish in addition to English were highest in both years. Additionally,from 2000 to 2010 the proportion of students in this university speaking Spanish only, two other languages and another language, except English language all grew, whereas the rate of students speaking English,French and only English and no other language decreased, the figure for German remained stable of the total students.
In 2000, the percentage of students being able to speak Spanish other than English were highest, at 30%, while the figure for no other language sector was slightly lower, at 20%.At the same time, Another language and Frech only group accouted for 15% of the total students. Meanwhile, 10% of those students were from two other languages and German only group similarly.
In 2010, the proportion of Spanish speakers group went up slowly by 5% to 35% and remained the highest figure in the bar chart. Similarly, there were insignificant increases to 15% and 20% in the rate of students in this university being able to speak two other languages and another language respectively. By contrast, the figures for no other language, French, German group fell to 10% similarly. ( The year 2010 witnessed slight fell to 10% in the figures for no other language, French, German group)

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The line graph illustrates the amount of average carbon dioxide emissions to each people in four countries, United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, Portugal within a 40 year period, from 1967 to 2007.
It is clear from the chart that the amout of Portugal’s average carbon dioxide emissions experienced the most dramatic change during 40 years. Additionally, the figures for Portugal, United Kingdom and Italy all increased, while Sweden’s figure dropped significantly.
In 1967, the quantity of average CO2 emissions per person in the UK was highest, at nearly 11 tonnes, while the figure for Portugal was dramatically lower, at only 1 tonnes. Meanwhile, there were about 9 tonnes CO2 discharged in Sweden. At the same time, just over 4 tonnes CO2 emissions was from Italy.
In 2007, the amount of UK’s CO2 emissions to each people fell insignificantly by 2 tonnes to fewer 9 tonnes and remained the highest figure in the line graph. Besides, Sweden saw a remarkable drop to around 5 tonnes in the quantity of average CO2 emissions. At the same time, there were remarkable grows to approximately 9 tonnes and 5 tonnes in the figure for Italy and Portugal respectively.

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The pie charts show the numbers of cases of marriage and divorce in America within a 30 year period, from 197 to 2000; and the proportions of USA’s adults never married, married, widowed and divorced.
It is clear from the charts that the quantity of marriages fell, whereas divorces’s figure experienced an insignificant change. Additionally, almost adults in the USA married during the research.
In terms of first bart chart, the number of marriages in two years, 1970 and 1980, were highest, at 2,5 million cases, while the years 1990 and 2000 witnessed slight drop to about 2,3 million and 2 million. From 197 to 1980, there was a slow increase by nearly 0,5 million to about 1,5 million in the quantity of divorces. After that, America saw insignificant decrease to just over 1 million and exactly 1 million in 1990, 2000.
In terms of the next bar chart, in both of the years, the percentage of adult Americans married was highest and there was a slight decline to aproximately 60% of the total marital status in this figure. Similarly, the year 2000 witnessed an insignificant decrease to nearly 5% in the rate of the widowed. Moreover, the proportions of the never married and the divorced experienced climbs to 20% and around 10% respectively.

1.
The pie charts compare the percentage of the students in a university in the UK, apart from English language, they can speak other languages in two year, 2000 and 2010.
It is clear from the charts that the rate of UK’s students only speaking Spanish in addition to English were highest in both years. Additionally,from 2000 to 2010 the proportion of students in this university speaking Spanish only, two other languages and another language, except English language all grew, whereas the rate of students speaking English,French and only English and no other language decreased, the figure for German remained stable of the total students.
In 2000, the percentage of students being able to speak Spanish other than English were highest, at 30%, while the figure for no other language sector was slightly lower, at 20%.At the same time, Another language and Frech only group accouted for 15% of the total students. Meanwhile, 10% of those students were from two other languages and German only group similarly.
In 2010, the proportion of Spanish speakers group went up slowly by 5% to 35% and remained the highest figure in the bar chart. Similarly, there were insignificant increases to 15% and 20% in the rate of students in this university being able to speak two other languages and another language respectively. By contrast, the figures for no other language, French, German group fell to 10% similarly. ( The year 2010 witnessed slight fell to 10% in the figures for no other language, French, German group)

2.
The line graph illustrates the amount of average carbon dioxide emissions to each people in four countries, United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, Portugal within a 40 year period, from 1967 to 2007.
It is clear from the chart that the amout of Portugal’s average carbon dioxide emissions experienced the most dramatic change during 40 years. Additionally, the figures for Portugal, United Kingdom and Italy all increased, while Sweden’s figure dropped significantly.
In 1967, the quantity of average CO2 emissions per person in the UK was highest, at nearly 11 tonnes, while the figure for Portugal was dramatically lower, at only 1 tonnes. Meanwhile, there were about 9 tonnes CO2 discharged in Sweden. At the same time, just over 4 tonnes CO2 emissions was from Italy.
In 2007, the amount of UK’s CO2 emissions to each people fell insignificantly by 2 tonnes to fewer 9 tonnes and remained the highest figure in the line graph. Besides, Sweden saw a remarkable drop to around 5 tonnes in the quantity of average CO2 emissions. At the same time, there were remarkable grows to approximately 9 tonnes and 5 tonnes in the figure for Italy and Portugal respectively.

3.
The pie charts show the numbers of cases of marriage and divorce in America within a 30 year period, from 197 to 2000; and the proportions of USA’s adults never married, married, widowed and divorced.
It is clear from the charts that the quantity of marriages fell, whereas divorces’s figure experienced an insignificant change. Additionally, almost adults in the USA married during the research.
In terms of first bart chart, the number of marriages in two years, 1970 and 1980, were highest, at 2,5 million cases, while the years 1990 and 2000 witnessed slight drop to about 2,3 million and 2 million. From 197 to 1980, there was a slow increase by nearly 0,5 million to about 1,5 million in the quantity of divorces. After that, America saw insignificant decrease to just over 1 million and exactly 1 million in 1990, 2000.
In terms of the next bar chart, in both of the years, the percentage of adult Americans married was highest and there was a slight decline to aproximately 60% of the total marital status in this figure. Similarly, the year 2000 witnessed an insignificant decrease to nearly 5% in the rate of the widowed. Moreover, the proportions of the never married and the divorced experienced climbs to 20% and around 10% respectively.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, moreover, similarly, so, whereas, while, apart from, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 7.0 271% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 6.8 338% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 115.0 33.7804878049 340% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3337.0 965.302439024 346% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 661.0 196.424390244 337% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04841149773 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07049507093 3.73543355544 136% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81876828957 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 106.607317073 233% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.375189107413 0.547539520022 69% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 985.5 283.868780488 347% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 15.0 4.33902439024 346% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 23.0 3.36585365854 683% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 8.94146341463 302% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1331593632 43.030603864 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.592592593 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4814814815 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.23603664747 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 12.0 3.83414634146 313% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 1.69756097561 1001% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416564082511 0.215688989381 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125189921993 0.103423049105 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175127030704 0.0843802449381 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201978259235 0.15604864568 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.229148648815 0.0819641961636 280% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 40.7170731707 258% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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