The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The 2 maps illustrates the present state of the middle of a little town known as Islip and how it will appear after reconstruction.

Presently, the town centre location is characterized by a few houses, a school and a park at the south. Coming from the west, there is a main road which has shops in opposite sides . In addition, there is a countryside at the northern part of the town.

On the other hand, the town promises to be more improved in terms of infrastructures. This is evident in the second map where a dual carriageway will be created. The initial main road shall be converted to pedestrian lane and retaining the shops by its south. Crossing over to the north, there is a bus station, shopping centre, car park and new housing. Furthermore, the school and the former housing by the south will still remain.

Votes
Average: 1 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cation is characterized by a few houses, a school and a park at the south. Coming...
^^
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...n road which has shops in opposite sides . In addition, there is a countryside at ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, second, so, still, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 679.0 965.302439024 70% => OK
No of words: 147.0 196.424390244 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61904761905 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.48200454523 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82463951429 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625850340136 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 199.8 283.868780488 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.015082844 43.030603864 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.4444444444 112.824112599 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.23603664747 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 13.2329268293 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 150 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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