The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The presented bar graph outlines the number of percentage changes between 15- 65 years and above
age groups on Australian men and women on physical exercises in 2010.

A glance at the chart reveals that the women are prone to spend more time on physical activity than men in all age groups except for the young women aging between 15-24 years.

The highest percentage of physical effort carried out by the mid aged ladies of age group 45-54 years is 53.3 and the least is recorded in age groups of 25-34 with 11.1 percentage difference. Where as the difference is 13.3 in the case of males, in which the young tend to exercise more in 15-24 age group of about 52.8 percentage.

With an average of 50.4 percentage the physical activity of women of all age groups remain almost close. But, there's a fluctuation observed in the physical effort of male leaving a less average of 38.2. However, it's interesting that both the genders of 65 years and above engage in physical activity is almost same.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, except for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 829.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71022727273 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39435215923 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551136363636 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.6394123635 43.030603864 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.166666667 112.824112599 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 22.9334400587 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.23603664747 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392266947932 0.215688989381 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.201854705006 0.103423049105 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882566040877 0.0843802449381 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23816505574 0.15604864568 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122791190053 0.0819641961636 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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