The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

A glance at the bar chart compares the proportion of regular physical activity that men and women played in 2010. Overall, form 25 years, female tend to take part in sports more than men,

At the age of 15-24 years old, 52.8% of men did regular physical; activity, which was 5% higher than women. However, from 25 to 34 years, this figure for males declined by 10% whereas females rose by 1.2%. The percentage of women age 35 to 44 participated in these activities witnessed a significant climb up to 52.5% while this figure for men continued to collapsed by approximately 3%.

The percentage of females in the age group of 45-54 peaked at 53.3% and this figure for males increased dramatically up to 43.1%. In the next group, it is experienced that 53% of women did sports while men rose by 2%. In the group of 65+, the proportion of males and females doing sports was nearly equaled.

In conclusion, females tended to do sports than men. While most males in the group 15-24 years participated in these physical activities, females form 45 to 54 did these the most.

Votes
Average: 7.2 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd to take part in sports more than men, At the age of 15-24 years old, 52.8% of ...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'sport'
Suggestion: sport
...it is experienced that 53% of women did sports while men rose by 2%. In the group of 6...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...les doing sports was nearly equaled. In conclusion, females tended to do sports...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, whereas, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 886.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66315789474 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58904574983 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536842105263 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1852184919 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4444444444 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.23603664747 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199659234291 0.215688989381 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09654816207 0.103423049105 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781216554978 0.0843802449381 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135190788377 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461179698599 0.0819641961636 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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