The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The vertical bar graph elucidates the information regarding how Australian men and women are constant about their physical health tasks among various age levels in the year 2010. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall, the bar chart outlines that as the age was increasing the count of men who were regular at their physical activities saw a downward trend whereas, women depicted a gradual rise from the beginning to the middle of the year, and a slight decrease by the end the year.
In the early period of the year, males from 15 to 24 were fit with nearly 53% of them being punctual, figures of middle aged males from 15-24 to 35-44 plunged by approximately 11% with almost 39.5%, was the least among all the groups in male category. However, the ranges 45 to 54, 54 to 64 and more than 65 witnessed a gradual rise in the efforts with rates 43.1%, 45.1% and 46.7% respectively.
On the other hand, although the female count was lower than males in the early 2010, the awareness among them slumped from 15 to 24(47.7%) to 45 to 54(53.3%) which was just over 5% rise. Alternatively, the number of females as they were getting older, proportion was deducted a little from 53% to 47% by the end of the year among the females with ages 55-64 and over 65.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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...on was deducted a little from 53% to 47% by the end of the year among the females...
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...e females with ages 55-64 and over 65.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, regarding, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1040.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 227.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58149779736 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41559167846 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 106.607317073 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581497797357 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 297.0 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.4239998537 43.030603864 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.571428571 112.824112599 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4285714286 22.9334400587 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170808788581 0.215688989381 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778247175081 0.103423049105 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971125946986 0.0843802449381 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125985386087 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096549590079 0.0819641961636 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.38 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.88 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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