The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Among the six age groups doing physical activity, even though of the most advanced age, the 65 and over group was steady at 46%. There was only a slight rise in the percentage of males over the females seen in the bar chart.
While women’s dominance in engaging in physical activities was evident across all pairs, only the 15 to 24 age group displayed a rise in male activity at 52.8% compared to females at 47.7%. The rest of the males paled with a steady average of 40%, across all groups, in clear contrast with the females who demonstrated an average of 50% moderate engagement in 4 out of 6 age groups.
Other than the 35 to 44 year old category, who displayed considerable difference, all the other age sectors showed only a slightly higher engagement than their pair. A close second to demonstrating a steep difference between the male and female average was the pair at the 55 to 64 age range.
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...s the pair at the 55 to 64 age range.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 748.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58895705521 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58415511409 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588957055215 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 234.9 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.947878936 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.666666667 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.23603664747 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152305502965 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802547669298 0.103423049105 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325170582012 0.0843802449381 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108052338184 0.15604864568 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286046037218 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.