the bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personel department at a company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their performance.write a repor

Essay topics:

the bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personel department at a company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their performance.
write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

contained in the bar chart is data pertaining to elements having influence on work performance by age at a company. The gist of the infographic is that the figures for the age group from 18 to 30 top those from 45 to 60 regarding most of the factors with the exception of work environment, respect from colleagues, competent boss and team spirit.

Beginning with promotion prospects, job security, relaxing working environment and change for personal development, it is obvious that the disparities between the two age groups are appreciable. As far as relaxing working condition and change for personal development are concerned, the figures for 18 to 30 strikingly exceed those for 45 to 60, amounting to just over 80 and about 35 versus north to 80 and approximately 45. The case is analogous in connection with promotion prospects and job security as the figures for 18 to 30 stand at more than 80 and in the neighbourhood of 40 while those for 45-60 reach 50 and 20 respectively.

turning to money, job satisfaction, respect from colleagues and competent boss, the differences between the age ranges are noticeably less substantial. With respect to money and job satisfaction, the figures for 18-30 diminutively outnumbered 45-60 with 70 and over 50 for the former and almost 70 and 50 for the latter. There is a different pattern regarding respect from co-workers and competent boss as 18-30 is exceeded by 45 to 60, south to 50 and over 40 versus well over 40 and just under 50, respectively.

A final point which is worth mentioning is that work environment and team spirit, there are near parities between the two age ranges, at 30 and about 65, in that order.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Contained
contained in the bar chart is data pertaining to ...
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Line 1, column 251, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
... 45 to 60 regarding most of the factors with the exception of work environment, respect from colleagu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'stand' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'stands'.
Suggestion: stands
...ob security as the figures for 18 to 30 stand at more than 80 and in the neighbourhoo...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Turning
... 45-60 reach 50 and 20 respectively. turning to money, job satisfaction, respect fro...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, so, well, while, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 6.8 265% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 3.97073170732 353% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1393.0 965.302439024 144% => OK
No of words: 286.0 196.424390244 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87062937063 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 3.73543355544 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99101503873 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482517482517 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 405.0 283.868780488 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.6426017811 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.777777778 112.824112599 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7777777778 22.9334400587 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.23603664747 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210849982702 0.215688989381 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104710389432 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494901392578 0.0843802449381 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148559370271 0.15604864568 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716737013991 0.0819641961636 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.2329268293 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 40.7170731707 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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