the bar chart below shows the types of music bought in USA in 2010 by age group

Essay topics:

the bar chart below shows the types of music bought in USA in 2010, by age group.

The bar chart comapes a variation of USA sales of recordings in millions by age group and music genre in 2010.
In general terms, the most popular music for age group 23 to 51 was Rock in 2010. In contrast, pop was the most popular music for age 16 to22 and classical was popular music for group over 58 years old.
It is clear from the bar chart show that the age of 16 to 22 and 23 to 31 liked Rock and Pop music and did not like classical music. The age of 16 to 22 bought recordings of Pop music about 4,9 million CDs in 2010 and the age of 23 to 31 bought recordings of Rock music nearly 4,1 million in this period. About 1,8 million recordings and 2,1 million recordings of classical music are bought by the age of 16 to 22 and 23 to 31 respectively.
In addtion, the age of 32 to 57 also liked Pop music in 2010. They bought about 3,1 million recordings for the age of 23 to 31 and around 3,9 million recordings for the age of 46 to 57. Besides, they hated listening to Rock music, just over 1 million recordings were sales. On the other hand, the age over 58 group liked classical music in this period. They bought 4,5 million recordings in 2010.

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Average: 8.8 (13 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, so, in contrast, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 934.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.13274336283 4.92477711251 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26541758744 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.384955752212 0.547539520022 70% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 262.8 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6117725915 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9090909091 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.23603664747 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351610725615 0.215688989381 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18174831331 0.103423049105 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926802889686 0.0843802449381 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269624196647 0.15604864568 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0904163550566 0.0819641961636 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 85.02 61.2550243902 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.67 11.4140731707 58% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.03 8.06136585366 75% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 40.7170731707 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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