The bar chart below illustrates the amount of Japanese travellers leaving their country, from the year 1985 to 1995. Moreover the second infographic, is a line graph which depicts Australia's share of the Japan's tourist industry.
In the bar chart, it shows during the year of 1985 the number of people travelling abroad was well over 4.5 million people. It was the lowest year compared to the next ten years. Then in 1990 the numbers of passengers increased gradually at about approximately over 10 million people. However, the following year (1991) the number of people dropped slightly. Later in 1995 the population of travellers reached it peak in between 16 million and 14 million.
On the other hand, the line graph demonstrates Australia's share of Japan's tourist industry was at it apex in the year 1994, the percentage rate of an estimate modestly above 6%, but in the following year 1995 the rate declined by a tiny bit at exactly 6%. Moreover during the year from 1985 to 1989 the pattern of the graph was increasing gradually. However, one year after 1989 the rate dropped significantly it was the first anomaly in the graph. Then in 1991 he percentage of the shares rose to approximately the same rate as it was before the big fall. From there on the rates steadily increased.
How can I improve to get 7
How can I improve to get 7 out of 9?
You did a good job actually.
You did a good job actually. The problem of the essay is that you have a lot of words 'the year', which is duplicated and make the score low.
Write more essays and don't repeat words, and then you will see great difference.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 118, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ir country, from the year 1985 to 1995. Moreover the second infographic, is a line graph...
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Line 3, column 412, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'peaks'?
Suggestion: peaks
...the population of travellers reached it peak in between 16 million and 14 million. ...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...e declined by a tiny bit at exactly 6%. Moreover during the year from 1985 to 1989 the p...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, then, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1070.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 222.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81981981982 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64202149402 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536036036036 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 283.868780488 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.7017422449 43.030603864 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1666666667 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210929161912 0.215688989381 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07396819952 0.103423049105 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762552222299 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16839640194 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0935663858672 0.0819641961636 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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