The chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000

Essay topics:

The chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000.

Given is the graph illustrating the proportion of different ages to the regional cinema around 2000.

It is clear that people at the age of 55 and older occupied the large percentage. By contrast, a 31-45-year-old person was the category receiving the least expenditure.

For the 10-15 age group, the proportion made up 21%, while, 15% was the figure for people between 16 and 20 years old. At the same time, people who were 21-30 were significantly lower at 8%.

In the rest of part, there were opposed to two indicators during this period. To be specific, the figure for people in the 31-45 age groups was lowest, at only 5%, by contrast, spending on this item in people aged 55 and older accounted for the largest proportion, at 51% of the total spending in this area

Votes
Average: 5.7 (4 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 645.0 965.302439024 67% => OK
No of words: 137.0 196.424390244 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70802919708 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.42121322205 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65911917866 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620437956204 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 188.1 283.868780488 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.8547350955 43.030603864 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1428571429 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5714285714 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.85714285714 5.23603664747 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0903358234307 0.215688989381 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484689586054 0.103423049105 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624822810227 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0756536663319 0.15604864568 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663052295627 0.0819641961636 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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