The charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008

Essay topics:

The charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.

The given two pie charts illustrates the daily schedule of working adults in one country for two different years, 1958 and 2008.Overall it can be seen that , most of the people spent time on working, where as that on going out decreased over the years.

In 1958, almost 33% of the adults spent the time on working and 32% time on sleeping 19% people passed time with friends and family for going out Apart from this , other activities such as playing sports, relaxing at home and travelling to work in this adults can spent 16% from their schedule.

In 2008, the time spent on working increased by 9% and the time spent on sleeping reduced by 7%. There was a significant decline in the time spent on going out with friends and family.It dropped from 19% to 6%. The time of travelling to work was increased from 2% to 8% . Also the time spent on relaxing at home and playing sports also rose from 8% to 13% and from 6% to 8% respectively.

To conclude, working and relaxing at home took more time from the one day schedule.

Votes
Average: 7.4 (56 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, apart from, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 841.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 188.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47340425532 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35676544374 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494680851064 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 235.8 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.5590955491 43.030603864 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.142857143 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8571428571 22.9334400587 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.23603664747 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327774411122 0.215688989381 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16782346733 0.103423049105 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940815406762 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200275114854 0.15604864568 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699321558486 0.0819641961636 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.2329268293 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 61.2550243902 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 11.4329268293 232% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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