The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts give information about the proportion of some different factors which make people in two age groups feel glad with. According the data, it is clear that achievement at work and doing hobbies are prominent among both groups, however, other factors in under 30 group and over 30 group are considerably different.

For those who aged under 30, 31% of them are satisfied with their success at work and the figure for enjoying their hobbies is lower, 22%, compared with 32% and 24% of over 30 group, respectively.The next-highest factor which bring happiness to youngsters is having a good appearance, at 18%, which is 3% higher than the number of travelling. Other unknown factor is slightly lower at 15%.

Other components that older people confirm make them pleased are significantly different from those of the younger. 20% of people who over 30 report that their financial security if important for happiness, whereas the figure for being with family is 14% and other unknown factors possess 10%.

Votes
Average: 9 (64 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 850.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05952380952 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67703659731 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630952380952 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 241.2 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.3724064839 43.030603864 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 141.666666667 112.824112599 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 22.9334400587 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.23603664747 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142533258854 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876952103904 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08899533283 0.0843802449381 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109606027963 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589089268698 0.0819641961636 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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