The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart demonstrate the results of a survey about the opinion of people from distinct age group on what makes them most happy.
Achievement at work has secured 1st position in both age group in term of making people happy with 31 and 32 percent respectively. Doing hobbies was the second most popular reason behind the happiness of age group under and over 30 with 22 and 24 percent. What is more, other factors were the least source of happiness among both age group with 14 and 10 percent
travelling among under 30 and being with family in over 30 age group were the second most least factor behind happiness of both age groups. Having a good appearance contributed in happiness of under 30 age group with 18 percent whereas, 20 percent of happiness came from financial security among over 30 lads
It is therefore, clear that, achievement at work and irrigating hobbies remained the most striking factors behind the happiness of both age group whereas less importance was given to appearance by over 30 with comparing with under 30's less significance to family

Votes
Average: 6.2 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 363, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng both age group with 14 and 10 percent travelling among under 30 and being with...
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Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'least' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: least
...ly in over 30 age group were the second most least factor behind happiness of both age gro...
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Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the least'.
Suggestion: most the least
...ly in over 30 age group were the second most least factor behind happiness of both age gro...
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Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...om financial security among over 30 lads It is therefore, clear that, achievement...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'whereas', 'what is more']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.279792746114 0.268076937826 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.119170984456 0.116061578633 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0932642487047 0.0759168565197 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0259067357513 0.0366838410393 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0103626943005 0.0131127313244 79% => OK
Prepositions: 0.217616580311 0.155750635184 140% => OK
Participles: 0.0466321243523 0.0379272487307 123% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5110188143 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0103626943005 0.0210936926555 49% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0777202072539 0.0948980150116 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.00437022459523 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0103626943005 0.00967000014798 107% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1073.0 1161.00487805 92% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.9 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8 5.90752243213 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73763899035 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.308108108108 0.337110787985 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.221621621622 0.247514529752 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.145945945946 0.171178102325 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.108108108108 0.112407865282 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5110188143 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513513513514 0.546246751206 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.4476073503 49.3433353143 88% => OK
How many sentences: 5.0 8.93414634146 56% => OK
Sentence length: 37.0 23.0094962315 161% => OK
Sentence length SD: 119.15972474 42.9750493124 277% => OK
Chars per sentence: 214.6 135.714022679 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.0 23.0094962315 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.4 0.689975730869 203% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.84146341463 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.48048780488 270% => OK
Readability: 59.1621621622 47.7609492067 124% => OK
Elegance: 3.5 2.94281807926 119% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343819741715 0.418131533498 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.268383761468 0.181151798455 148% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.137366646969 0.0850326197045 162% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.800519843921 0.706616315825 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141519533266 0.157042692854 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.25652827934 0.228904883108 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132347564627 0.108899403657 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.380029897593 0.367819155151 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.116521998839 0.0812612215331 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277332138651 0.316326947829 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133576415017 0.0921553760075 145% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70731707317 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.08536585366 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.16585365854 158% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.02926829268 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 5.0 7.1512195122 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.