The charts show the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics: The charts show the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts illustrate what did school leavers do after graduating from secondary school in Australia from 1980 to 2000.

It is clear from the given charts that there was a upward trend in the proportion of employed school leavers whilst the rate of schoolchildren chose to have further education decreased gradually throughout 20 years.

In 1980, a half of Australian school leavers chose to continue their study after secondary graduation. This rate plummetted to just 38 per cent after a decade and remained relatively stable at 37 per cent 10 years later.

In contrast, the percentage of pupils pursued a job right after leaving secondary school increased steadily over the shown period, from 40 per cent in the initial stage to over a half after 2 decades.

The figure for those who have no job after graduating from secondary school, however, saw a minor fluctuation when this rate rose by 2 per cent to 12 per cent from 1980 to 1990, followed by a decrease to 8 per cent in 2000.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 50, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, second, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 830.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82558139535 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65200415046 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587209302326 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.1818913775 43.030603864 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.333333333 112.824112599 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 22.9334400587 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.23603664747 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217451875589 0.215688989381 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134728426421 0.103423049105 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841291674566 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140337583108 0.15604864568 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656198849695 0.0819641961636 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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