The charts show information about children learning musical instruments in 1996 and 2016 in the UK

Essay topics:

The charts show information about children learning musical instruments in 1996 and 2016 in the UK.

The given mixchart illustrates the data about children learning musical instruments in the United Kingdom between 1996 and 2016.
What stands out from the mixchart is that the percentage of children learned instrument has the upward trend at 2016. In addition, while the most choice of them in 1996 is piano, the best choice in 2016 is keyboard.
In 1996, the percentage of children who learned musical instrument started from 44% before witnessed an remarkable surge in 2016, at 76%. In contrast, in term of children not learned, the figure was tumble from 56% to 24% in 1996 and 2016, respetively.
Regarding the bar chart, piano was the best choice in 1996 with 30%. Ranked second is keyboard, at roughly 21%. Following by Violin, electric guitar and more than 1 instrument, both them no more than 15%. Both acounstic guitar adn other less than 10%. Until 2016, Keyboard was becoming to popular, at 30% while piano just roughly 27%. Both electric guitar and more than 1 instrument witnessed an substantials improve to around 16% and 14%, respectively. In contrast, Violin, acounstic guitar and others was tumble to no more than 10%.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 78, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to instrument'
Suggestion: to instrument
...that the percentage of children learned instrument has the upward trend at 2016. In additi...
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Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ument started from 44% before witnessed an remarkable surge in 2016, at 76%. In co...
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ed an remarkable surge in 2016, at 76%. In contrast, in term of children not learn...
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Line 4, column 393, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ar and more than 1 instrument witnessed an substantials improve to around 16% and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
regarding, second, while, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 952.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98429319372 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58075355614 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544502617801 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6407892757 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.3333333333 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9166666667 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.23603664747 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293219411705 0.215688989381 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112141081613 0.103423049105 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119261004233 0.0843802449381 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240941057054 0.15604864568 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11945187756 0.0819641961636 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 61.2550243902 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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