The diagram below shows the percentage of deaths from heart disease and cancer and calories consumed from processed food in different countries

Essay topics:

The diagram below shows the percentage of deaths from heart disease and cancer and calories consumed from processed food in different countries.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of death from heart disease and cancer and it also depicts percentage of calories consumed from processed food in 12 different countriee.Overall it can be seen that highest percentage of death due to heart and cancer disease in Hungary.However, the huge percentage of calories from processes foods consumed by people of Laos.

The contradictory pattern is observed in the graph.The percentage of death due to heart and cancer disease is the highest in Hungary at 90% .whereas in the USA , there are almost 80% people suffering from the heart and cancer disease.In belgium,Sweden and Finland the proportion remains between 60% to 70%. Moreover , heart and cancer patients remain in Portugal, Venezuela,Greece and Mexico in the range of 45% to 25%. Apart from that, less than 20% people are suffering from such diseases in Korea,Thailand and Laos.

However, the consumption of calories from the processed food is the highest in the Laos around 90%. The proportion of the calories from the processed food consumption by the people of countries like Thailand, Korea, mexico , Greece and Venezuela in the range of 70% to 30%. Moreover, intake of calories from processed food in countries such as Hungary, USA, Belgium, Sweden, Finland, Portugal, and Venezuela are in the range of 10% to 30%.

To conclude, the countries where less percentage of calories are consumed show a higher proportion of heart and cancer diseases.

Votes
Average: 7 (8 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, whereas, apart from, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1229.0 965.302439024 127% => OK
No of words: 235.0 196.424390244 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22978723404 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05133733926 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451063829787 0.547539520022 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 360.0 283.868780488 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.441036499 43.030603864 219% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 153.625 112.824112599 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.375 22.9334400587 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.23603664747 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.525372003938 0.215688989381 244% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.234513282967 0.103423049105 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143702734113 0.0843802449381 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338917444999 0.15604864568 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145341726136 0.0819641961636 177% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.2329268293 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 11.4140731707 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 11.4329268293 245% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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