The diagram shows production of sugar by a German company for supermarkets and restaurants

Essay topics:

The diagram shows production of sugar by a German company for supermarkets and restaurants

The diagram depicts the manufacturing process of sugar for restaurants and supermarkets by a German company.
Overall, the process comprises eight stages which starts with the harvest of raw materials and culminating in delivery.

As the picture displays, the first stage of producing sugar is harvesting sugarcane, which is the raw material of sugar, from tropical regions. Then raw juice is collected for those sugarcane using a crusher. Next, the juice is partially filtered to gather raw sugar which is shipped to germany for the subsequent processing. When the raw reaches germany, they pass through melting and filtering stage where the complete purification is done. The melted sugar is now called sugar syrup which transforms into crystals in stage 5. In the subsequent stage, the sugar crystals are dried using fans after which the newly made sugar is packed.

In final step, sugar packs are delivery to supermarkets and restaurants by trucks.

Votes
Average: 6.3 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this sugarcane' or 'those sugarcanes'?
Suggestion: this sugarcane; those sugarcanes
...egions. Then raw juice is collected for those sugarcane using a crusher. Next, the juice is par...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 820.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 156.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25641025641 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78385266033 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608974358974 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.8553041843 43.030603864 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.1111111111 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 22.9334400587 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 5.23603664747 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243380357541 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116152456531 0.103423049105 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130847033 0.0843802449381 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179386385045 0.15604864568 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685346225357 0.0819641961636 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.06136585366 118% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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