The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The pictorial map illustrates the transformation of a school site from 2004 to 2024.

Overall, it is clear that the number of students will expand from 600 to 1000 between 2004 and 2024, and the area of greenery will be diminished on the north-east and south-east of the school site in 2024.

To begin with, school building 1 and school building 2 will be connected by a hallway, and a path running from west to east will be shortened. Meanwhile, the old school field which was located to the east of the path in 2004 will be replaced by a new school build in 2024.

On the other hand, outside the main school districts. These areas will be mainly surrounded by a new road which will go through from car park 1 to car park 2, which will be situated to the east of new school building. On the south of the car park 2, there will be a new sports field.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, while, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 704.0 965.302439024 73% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34567901235 4.92477711251 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43569953416 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 78.0 106.607317073 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 180.0 283.868780488 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.1 1.45097560976 76% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3376179853 43.030603864 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.571428571 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226541081845 0.215688989381 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147061635751 0.103423049105 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107883433923 0.0843802449381 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198254844737 0.15604864568 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100831676944 0.0819641961636 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 90.43 61.2550243902 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.25 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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