The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas student in Australia.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates four countries of residence of oversea students in Australia. Among the four countries are Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore.
In the graph, it is clearly shown that during the range of years between 1982 and 1989. Malaysia contains the most student residing in Australia. In 1990, Hong Kong surpassed Malaysia but quickly in 1993 been overtook by Indonesia which remained having the most students residing after the year 1994. Singapore on the other hand remained the lowest till the year 1998 when it overtook Malaysia and Hong Kong and had the second most students. Every country except Singapore had a sudden decline throughout the year. Only Singapore remained the only country that increased gradually without any decline throughout the years.
Based on the graph below, all countries did not pass the 30000 mark throughout the year. In the year 2000, Malaysia went from the country with the most amount of students residing there to the country with the least.
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Essay evaluation report
Among the four countries are Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore.
The four countries are Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore.
it is clearly shown that during the range of years between 1982 and 1989. Malaysia contains the most student residing in Australia.
it is clearly shown that during the range of years between 1982 and 1989, Malaysia contains the most student residing in Australia. //wrong punctuation marks here
flaws:
No. of Words: 163 200
No. of Different Words: 88 100
Need to give a little bit more content for the sudden decline or increase years, this is too simple:
Every country except Singapore had a sudden decline throughout the year.
and how about the sudden increase? it is lost.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 163 200
No. of Characters: 820 1000
No. of Different Words: 88 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.573 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.031 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.364 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 56 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 49 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.849 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.2 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.589 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 210, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'overtaken'.
Suggestion: overtaken
...assed Malaysia but quickly in 1993 been overtook by Indonesia which remained having the ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, second, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 844.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17791411043 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41200280617 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564417177914 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 234.9 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3197955138 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20065184733 0.215688989381 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109375552642 0.103423049105 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115008148986 0.0843802449381 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189045250903 0.15604864568 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0929054711752 0.0819641961636 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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