The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of the population which aged 65 and more in three various countries,from 1948 to 2014.

Overall, it can be seen that all these countries population of aged 65 and over increase in future. Although, USA had highest population in starting time in Japan had lowest population, in the last year, USA will be has lowest population and Japan will has highest population.

Looking at the graph in more detail, it is evident that the proportion of aged 65 and over which had 9% in the USA in 1940. Population of America sharply increased to almost 15% in 1980.After that it goes slightly decrease till 2020. Then after the USA population rapidly increase to more than 20% in the last year. Similarly, the proportion of Sweden aged 65 and over which populate to 7% in 1940. The population of Sweden significantly increased to 14% in 1980. Between 2000 to 2020 Sweden reach 20% population of aged 65 and over.In the last year,Swedenwill get 25% population .

Turning to the remaining data sets, it is clearly seen that the proportion of 65 and over age which was populate 5% in Japan in 1940.Japan population of 65 and over minimally decreased to 3% in 1980,after that it has increasing to 7% in 2020.Then after Japan population dramatically increase to 27% in 2040,which is highest number in the graph.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , from
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... Overall, it can be seen that all these countries population of aged 65 and over increase...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...population of aged 65 and over increase in future. Although, USA had highest population i...
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Suggestion: had the highest
... over increase in future. Although, USA had highest population in starting time in Japan ha...
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Suggestion: had the lowest
...st population in starting time in Japan had lowest population, in the last year, USA will ...
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...pulation, in the last year, USA will be has lowest population and Japan will has highest p...
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...be has lowest population and Japan will has highest population. Looking at the graph ...
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...each 20% population of aged 65 and over.In the last year,Swedenwill get 25% popula...
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... last year,Swedenwill get 25% population . Turning to the remaining data sets...
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Suggestion: Then
...er that it has increasing to 7% in 2020.Then after Japan population dramatically inc...
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Suggestion: is the highest
...matically increase to 27% in 2040,which is highest number in the graph.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, similarly, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 33.7804878049 154% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 3.97073170732 428% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1120.0 965.302439024 116% => OK
No of words: 230.0 196.424390244 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86956521739 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91201409513 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45652173913 0.547539520022 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 325.8 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.5141163446 43.030603864 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.23603664747 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 1.69756097561 1001% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381409969375 0.215688989381 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1837187785 0.103423049105 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122101643275 0.0843802449381 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257848444784 0.15604864568 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798799875714 0.0819641961636 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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