The graph shows the average Japanese monthly salary Yen from 1953 to 1983 and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period

Essay topics:

The graph shows the average Japanese monthly salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.

The given line graph provides a comparison of the monthly wage of the Japanese over a 30-year period and the selling prices in terms of black and white televisions and color televisions in a similar period.
From an overall perspective, it is evident that the Japanese monthly earnings witnessed an upward trend after 30 years whereas the reversed pattern should be observed for the prices of two types of viewing equipment over the years shown.
According to the data on the diagram, it is highlighted that the selling prices of black and white televisions reached a peak and were roughly higher than the average monthly wage of Japanese residents at the beginning of the period, which charged the consumers 110 thousand Yen per item. For the next 10 years, the price of color televisions hosted the first rank in a diagram while the price of others decreased from 110 thousand Yen in 1970 to 40 thousand Yen which was less than 2 times when compared with the former prices. Following that, the Japanese salary per month slightly increased to exactly 20 thousand Yen.
Moving to the next period, it is noticeable that the price of black and white televisions and the monthly wage of the Japanese met the same record in 1990, which was around nearly 30 thousand Yen. Subsequently, the price of color television continuously stood at the highest point in the chart, which was doubled the two remaining numbers. However, at the end of the period, the statistics for two types of viewing machines dramatically decreased, with the prices of color televisions and black and white televisions were nearly 50 thousand Yen and 20 thousand Yen respectively. Finally, the monthly wage of Japanese people rose from 30 thousand Yen in 1990 to 70 thousand Yen in the end.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 965.302439024 152% => OK
No of words: 300.0 196.424390244 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88666666667 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 3.73543355544 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63156902922 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 106.607317073 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 436.5 283.868780488 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.4738957831 43.030603864 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.888888889 112.824112599 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.3333333333 22.9334400587 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.23603664747 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438321050415 0.215688989381 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.210237664281 0.103423049105 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953260618263 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282420904797 0.15604864568 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120143643026 0.0819641961636 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.2329268293 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 61.2550243902 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 40.7170731707 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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