IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Bar Graph:
» You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK University in 2009.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
ou should write at least 150 words.
UK and international students gaining second class degrees or better
The bar graph depicts information about the comparison of obtaining grades in the second class or even better in eight scientific and art subjects between the UK and foreign students which were indicated in x-axis. Oppositely vertical axis points out the number of learners in the percentage from 20% to 100%.
Now turning to the detail, in 2009 the highest attendance of international students was at information technology around 90 percent, as a result of development in technologies, during the UK learners preferred to pay their attention on art history and sociology exactly 80 percent. On the other hand, there was similar fashion on nursing somewhere in the vicinity of 75% in addition to, exactly 60% attended on Accountancy. Foreign students were active in acquiring their proper knowledge on electrical engineering 80% than the UK students who achieved less 20 percent in that subject. Contrary, the vast majority of British students gained their second class grade on English literature as foreign learners were less than just around 7%. The local student numbers were higher on international law about 70% than abroad students just under 50%.
As is observed, the figures for getting second class degree was more higher among international learners with hurriedly acclivity on technology and art history learners reached its peak among the UK students in 2009.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...re higher on international law about 70% than abroad students just under 50%. As...
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Message: Use only 'higher' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: higher
...res for getting second class degree was more higher among international learners with hurri...
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Suggestion:
...ts peak among the UK students in 2009.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so, as for, in addition, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1161.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 219.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30136986301 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81275573726 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 106.607317073 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607305936073 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 347.4 283.868780488 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6172702793 43.030603864 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.125 112.824112599 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.375 22.9334400587 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 5.23603664747 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208267490596 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883711896131 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522518325792 0.0843802449381 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147856025773 0.15604864568 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503109388497 0.0819641961636 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.2329268293 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 61.2550243902 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 11.4140731707 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 40.7170731707 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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