The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map show two proposed location for a new supermarket for the town of Garlsdon.
In terms of, neither site is appropriate for all the towns, but for customers in Grasdon, Hidon and Gransdon, the out-of-town site (S1) would probably offer advantages.
The first suitable location (S1) is outside the town and is sited just off the main road to the town of Hidon, lying 12 kms to the north-west. This site is in the countryside and be able to accommodation a lot of car parking. This can attract many shopper from both Hidon and Garlsdon who could travelling by car. Besides, it is also close to the railway line linking the two town to Gralsdon (25 kms to the south-east), a potentially large number of shoppers would also be able to travel by train.
In contrast, the another suggested location, S2 is a right in the Town center which would be good for local residents. Theoretically the store could be accessed by road or rail from surrounding to towns including Bransdon (16 kms to the south-west), but as the the central area is a no-traffic zone, cars would be unable to park and access would difficult.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'shows'.
Suggestion: shows
The map show two proposed location for a new superma...
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Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun car seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of cars'.
Suggestion: a lot of cars
...ountryside and be able to accommodation a lot of car parking. This can attract many shopper ...
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Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun shopper seems to be countable; consider using: 'many shoppers'.
Suggestion: many shoppers
... a lot of car parking. This can attract many shopper from both Hidon and Garlsdon who could ...
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Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ansdon 16 kms to the south-west, but as the the central area is a no-traffic zone, cars...
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Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ansdon 16 kms to the south-west, but as the the central area is a no-traffic zone, cars...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 911.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62436548223 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7592649837 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58883248731 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7058990832 43.030603864 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.875 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.23603664747 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259521421012 0.215688989381 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13249324733 0.103423049105 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155856983499 0.0843802449381 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218665433446 0.15604864568 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.179512754942 0.0819641961636 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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