The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The maps show two possible sites for the supermarket.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The maps show two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map points out two possible locations for the supermarket of Garlsdon's town.

Overall, it is easy to relize that the first choice locates in the countryside near North West main road while the second location is in the centre of town.

As mentioned, the first location for the new supermarket, from now on called S1, is in the countryside near Hildon, a place with the population of 10 000. With this position, not only residents from Hildon but also Bransdon persons can visit it easily. Besides, in a surburb area, it's not difficult to build a huge car park. This makes a chance for many many people to reach there. Moreover, S1 also nears a railway which runs through the town, hence, it's so convenient for shoppers (or visitors) who go by train.

Unlike S1, the second location, herein after called S2, is in the centre of the town. So it's the most suitable for local residents. S2 has a favorable position with short distance to three main roads, for details, it's 12 km to Hindon, 16 km to Bransdon and to Cransdon, it is 25 km. What a shortcoming if not mention railway which locates in the surrounding of the supermarket, another mode of transport shoppers can choose. There is only a disadvantage to S2, which may becomes big problem, because of locating in the centre, it's so difficult to find a car park, evenly build a parking lot. This leads to fewer options of mode of transport for people who want to go there.

It's not clear to say which location is the best. Since there's no place which is comfortable for everyone. But S1 may allow residents to have more options on choosing vehicles.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: many
... huge car park. This makes a chance for many many people to reach there. Moreover, S1 als...
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Line 7, column 90, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ed S2, is in the centre of the town. So its the most suitable for local residents. ...
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Line 9, column 56, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...o say which location is the best. Since theres no place which is comfortable for every...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 965.302439024 138% => OK
No of words: 288.0 196.424390244 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61111111111 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 3.73543355544 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56384525062 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 106.607317073 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559027777778 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 283.868780488 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 1.53170731707 588% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6923254329 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.23603664747 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196998775261 0.215688989381 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071091834615 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101307405637 0.0843802449381 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152725760831 0.15604864568 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14623659872 0.0819641961636 178% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 40.7170731707 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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