The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now ans plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now ans plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

One of the two presented blueprints is the outlay of Islip town at present and the other one depicts the possible improvement that could be done at the town centre.A quick glance at these maps show the major plan.

Fortunately, many plans were at work to develop the centre. One of which is expanding the shops and replaced with bus halt, shopping mall and car park along with new housing lanes on either side i.e., north and south side of the main road which would be changed later to a walkers road.

The distinguishing part was the two lane road all around the centre with Y junctions on eastern and western side connecting the school ,housing ,park and other important places. For this purpose the partial area of park and major area of farm area was cut off.

However, school, housing , and shops to the south side of pedestrian road remain unchanged.

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...her one depicts the possible improvement that could be done at the town centre.A ...
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... that could be done at the town centre.A quick glance at these maps show the maj...
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...s show the major plan. Fortunately, many plans were at work to develop the ...
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...ely, many plans were at work to develop the centre. One of which is expanding th...
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...hich is expanding the shops and replaced with bus halt, shopping mall and car par...
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... a walkers road. The distinguishing part was the two lane road all around th...
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Line 9, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...d the centre with Y junctions on eastern and western side connecting the school ...
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Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...with Y junctions on eastern and western side connecting the school ,housing ,par...
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Line 9, column 138, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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... and western side connecting the school ,housing ,park and other important place...
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Line 9, column 147, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...ern side connecting the school ,housing ,park and other important places. For th...
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Line 9, column 173, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...chool ,housing ,park and other important places. For this purpose the partial are...
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Line 9, column 252, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...area of park and major area of farm area was cut off. However, school, hous...
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Line 13, column 25, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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... cut off. However, school, housing , and shops to the south side of pedest...
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Line 13, column 37, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... However, school, housing , and shops to the south side of pedestrian road r...
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Line 13, column 51, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...chool, housing , and shops to the south side of pedestrian road remain unchange...
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Line 13, column 71, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... shops to the south side of pedestrian road remain unchanged.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 719.0 965.302439024 74% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73026315789 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31960775106 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638157894737 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 206.1 283.868780488 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1630981405 43.030603864 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.833333333 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.83333333333 5.23603664747 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0795304724419 0.215688989381 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0351454535472 0.103423049105 34% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349228138468 0.0843802449381 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0429166240784 0.15604864568 28% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402569893978 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.2329268293 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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