The pie charts below show the a average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The pie charts below show the a average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

The provided pie charts illustrate the total money spent in a specific nation in two years in 1950 and 2010.

Overall, it can be seen that housing and food were by far the largest expenditure by this country in both years, while health care confirmed the lowest. All categories show a sudden soar in their percentage except housing and education.

Looking at the data in more detail, it is clear that , in 1950, the average money spent in food accounted 11.2%.Then ,it surged to 34% in 2010.In terms of health care, it doubled from 2.4% in 1950 to 4.5% in 2010. In addition, both transportation and other items make up 14% and 19.2% respectively in 2010.

Turning to remaining items, it is evident that in 1950 this country allocated less than three quarters of their money in housing, which was the largest percentage.Then , it experiences a sharp plummet in 2010, with 22%. Moreover, in terms of education, there was a slight plunge of the money spent in this category by 0.3% from 6.6% to 6.3%.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, so, then, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 839.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79428571429 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6228444667 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622857142857 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8730790153 43.030603864 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.857142857 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 22.9334400587 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.23603664747 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248712619745 0.215688989381 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964708384205 0.103423049105 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690652552437 0.0843802449381 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140110184429 0.15604864568 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546648617299 0.0819641961636 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 61.2550243902 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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