The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of money was expended in two nations, that are japan and Malaysia in year of 2010.

It is totally vivid, the large proportion of money spent on food about 24% in japan while Malaysia had spent in around 27% on food which is more than in compare of japan expenditure. In contrast, japan had expended in massive amount of money on expense of other goods and services purposes at 29% where as in Malaysia had invest 3% less than around 26% on other goods and services. In comparison of Malaysia expenditure about 34% on housing while investment of housing, japan is far behind than Malaysia's disbursement where the investment of japan on housing at 21%.

Furthermore, the investment of money in Japan has spent more about 6% on health care while Malaysia had expended around only at 3% proportion of money on health care similarly, japan invested a money on transport at 27% whereas Malaysia expenditure is 10% less than japan.

Overall, the japan expenditure in other good and services was larger than Malaysia similarly Malaysia investment is enormous in housing.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ut 24% in japan while Malaysia had spent in around 27% on food which is more than...
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...ther goods and services purposes at 29% where as in Malaysia had invest 3% less than aro...
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...urposes at 29% where as in Malaysia had invest 3% less than around 26% on other goods ...
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...urposes at 29% where as in Malaysia had invest 3% less than around 26% on other goods ...
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...und 26% on other goods and services. In comparison of Malaysia expenditure about 34% on ho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, similarly, so, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 926.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95187165775 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70930433997 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.547539520022 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 287.1 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.2274702725 43.030603864 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.333333333 112.824112599 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1666666667 22.9334400587 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 5.23603664747 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186385052911 0.215688989381 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124158833058 0.103423049105 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579682167219 0.0843802449381 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146766700152 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480478395755 0.0819641961636 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.2329268293 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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