The pie charts illustrate the result of a research in terms of the cultural and leisure activities that boys and girls take part in.

Essay topics:

The pie charts illustrate the result of a research in terms of the cultural and leisure activities that boys and girls take part in.

The pie charts illustrate the result of a research in terms of the cultural and leisure activities that boys and girls take part in.
Overall, boys put the most effort into playing computer games, while dancing is the most popular activity of girls. It is also noticeable that both sexes have the same figure for listening to music.
Turning to the first activity group, 34% is the percentage of boys attending computer games, which is biggest in the charts, while the figure of girls is only 16%. Following this, reading in girls’ activities is over 10 times higher than that of boys. Finally, 10% is the proportion for listening to music activities of boys and girls.
Regarding to the remaining activity group, boys prefer playing basketball than taking other activities, with the figure accounting for 26%. Likewise, 27% of total girls’ activities is to take part in dancing, while that of netball is significant lower, just only 15%. Additionally, the percentage of skateboarding in boys is also the same as gymnastics in girls, with 11%.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...The pie charts illustrate the result of a research in terms of the cultural and leisure ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, likewise, regarding, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 884.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05142857143 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7223879074 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548571428571 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.2795982456 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2222222222 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4444444444 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410451332664 0.215688989381 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185451047287 0.103423049105 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.290920659131 0.0843802449381 345% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.347023396991 0.15604864568 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.379847058935 0.0819641961636 463% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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