The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

Essay topics:

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The pie-charts illustrate information about survey conducted for measuring the proportion of children in different activities. First pie-chart gives idea about events, in which boys participated, while second pie-chart shows girls' participation in various cultural and leisure activities.

Overall, it is readily apparent that, boys preferred computer games to take part in, as compared to other activities ,however, girls like to take part in dancing related events.

To begin with, only 2% boys participated in reading activities, while they play computer games with percentage of 34. Moreover, activities such as, listening to music and skateboarding are also less preferred by boys, 10% and 11% respectively. Basketball, comes on the second place, in which boys love to participate, by 26%. Similarly, result of the study also shows that 17% boys take part in Soccer, that takes third place among all activities.

In addition, listening to music and gymnastics like activities are less popular among girls with the percentage of 10 and 11 respectively. Furthermore, more than 19% of boys, girls participated in reading.15% girls choose netball as a leisure activity to take part in. Moving further, computer games are also selected by 16% girls. Finally, dancing is an activity, that is famous among girls, so that 27% girls participated in dancing rega competitions.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, similarly, so, third, while, in addition, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1175.0 965.302439024 122% => OK
No of words: 212.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54245283019 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04263565342 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 106.607317073 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599056603774 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 283.868780488 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3864911264 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.818181818 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2727272727 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8181818182 5.23603664747 226% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286170983755 0.215688989381 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100579317825 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762088953097 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165547360399 0.15604864568 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692338162929 0.0819641961636 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 11.4140731707 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 40.7170731707 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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