The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps give information about a park when it first published in 1920 and in recent years.

Overall, it can be seen that more entertaining places were built and that a new entrance beneath the ground was constructed for car parking purpose.

In 1920, a number of chairs were placed around the rectangle park. There were two entrances located in the middle of the park, on Arnold avenue and Eldon street respectively. A fountain was located in the central park, and the stage for musicians was just nearby on the left. A lake for water trees was just on the top right corner of the park.

Recently, the park had changed considerably. A children's play area was erected to replace the former pond. The fountain was demolished to make new way for a rose garden, and seats were gathered to around the rose garden. A modern amphitheatre for concerts has been built at the original site of the stage for musicians. A water feature was relocated to the right-hand corner of the park. A new car park was constructed underground at the Southeast of the park.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
... published in 1920 and in recent years. Overall, it can be seen that more entert...
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...d to the right-hand corner of the park. A new car park was constructed undergroun...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 879.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72580645161 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61653471259 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55376344086 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 262.8 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.4594397855 43.030603864 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.25 112.824112599 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 5.23603664747 14% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171081565362 0.215688989381 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791254376737 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626630262235 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129042035431 0.15604864568 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660102444371 0.0819641961636 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.2329268293 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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