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The plans show how a coastal land has developed into a coastal park

The given maps illustrates the development of a coastal land became a park.
It is clear that the inside land has been upgrade by CAFE', car park, lake,... and the park has been connected with the beach by a bridge cross the cliffs.
Before the development, all of the buildings in this land were used for agriculture. In the North,there was a road run straight from left to right. In the South of this land, there were cliffs, beach and sea respectively from inside to the outside. In the center of this land, there were fam buildings, this sites were connected with the road. In the West, there was an unused land and a holding pen. In the East, all of the Eastern land was used to crop.
After the change, the farm buidings that connected with the Northern road has been replaced by a car park. In the South, there has been a bridge cross the cliffs to make commuting easier. In the West, the unused land and the cage have been vanished and a lake has been built, surrounded by trees. In the East, the agriculture land has been replaced by a cafe' and a woods surrounded by trees.

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 74, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...has been upgrade by CAFE, car park, lake,... and the park has been connected with ...
^^
Line 3, column 25, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ss the cliffs. Before the development, all of the buildings in this land were used for ag...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
... were used for agriculture. In the North,there was a road run straight from left to ri...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 250, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...spectively from inside to the outside. In the center of this land, there were fam...
^^
Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...his sites were connected with the road. In the West, there was an unused land and ...
^^
Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e was an unused land and a holding pen. In the East, all of the Eastern land was u...
^^
Line 3, column 415, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ed land and a holding pen. In the East, all of the Eastern land was used to crop. After ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 298, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ke has been built, surrounded by trees. In the East, the agriculture land has been...
^^
Line 4, column 364, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a wood' or simply 'woods'?
Suggestion: a wood; woods
...re land has been replaced by a cafe and a woods surrounded by trees.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 884.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39800995025 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36764700343 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457711442786 0.547539520022 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 261.0 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 17.1912321123 43.030603864 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.0 112.824112599 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4615384615 22.9334400587 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.461538461538 5.23603664747 9% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175268374562 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729663342716 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0913723420631 0.0843802449381 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155812221797 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128209515937 0.0819641961636 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 13.2329268293 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 61.2550243902 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.94 11.4140731707 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.42 8.06136585366 80% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments