Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.
In our daily life, news concerning that successful people who earns a lot of money always gets on people’s nerves. Especially for those sports professionals who have great achievements and a lot of money, some people don’t think they deserve so much money. From my perspective, earning a great deal money has nothing to do with professionals.
We are living in a world with rapid advancement, in some people’s opinion, sports is far less important than other professionals such as science and technology because they have a lot to do with a nation’s development, as a consequence, people in these fields should be paid more money and bonus. It is undoubted reasonable. However, every field has the same significance and people who make contribution in their fields should earn what they deserve.
It is universal acknowledged that money people earn has a great to do with their ability. As long as your excellent ability is achieved, the money you earn is deserved no matter what the field you are in. For instant, people who have great contribution in literary can publish their works and earn great money, MoYan, who has won Nobel Price, has proved it. What’s more, as we all know, YaoMing, a famous basketball player, who is very rich, earns what is equal to his hard work. Not only he realized his dream and broke the record, but also he has made the whole China take pride in him. Sports also represent a country’s image, so whoever improves country’s image and strengthens are worth of great money.
In conclusion, every profession is equally essential. It is fair enough for people who make achievements in their specific professions get their return. It is a prove for their hard work and dedication.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 331, Rule ID: PRICE_PRIZE[3]
Message: Did you mean 'Nobel Prize' (reward)?
Suggestion: Nobel Prize
...nd earn great money, MoYan, who has won Nobel Price, has proved it. What’s more, as we all ...
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Line 9, column 160, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...fic professions get their return. It is a prove for their hard work and dedication.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 5.60731707317 606% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 965.302439024 170% => OK
No of words: 330.0 196.424390244 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97878787879 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81075103767 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 106.607317073 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542424242424 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 283.868780488 172% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 8.94146341463 201% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.4670329541 43.030603864 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2777777778 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 3.70975609756 350% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.481236394377 0.215688989381 223% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152481526996 0.103423049105 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158826532773 0.0843802449381 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328918575307 0.15604864568 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.317632087422 0.0819641961636 388% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 40.7170731707 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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