Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters Do u support it or not Agree Disagree

Essay topics:

 Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do u support it or not? (Agree/Disagree)

Today, role models are the person to whom youngsters look up. Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are the role model for the youngsters nowadays. In this essay, we will discuss the advantage and disadvantage of the role model in the further a paragraph, as follows.

Firstly, role models can be anyone family member, sports stars, and film stars. Role models are the person on which youngsters follow and be like them. They follow their advertisement, brands, lifestyles and other things it increases the obsession of youngsters to be like them. It affects their life and they go on the wrong path. Furthermore, Film stars do many things like drinking, smoking and other thinks be an idol they start doing the same. Therefore, it exemplifies that youngsters start following the same thing which their role model do thus it affect it negative ways.

Secondly, role models are the person who increases the motivation helps people to achieve and made the future of the youngsters. For example, Virat Kholi is a captain of Indian cricket team he follows Sachin Tendulkar moreover, many film stars follow Amitabh Bachchan as a role model. Role helps to achieve and Being on the correct path. therefore it exemplifies, that role model helps their fans to be like him and achieve something in their life.
In the conclusion, role models help youngsters to be like them and achieve and make their wishes likewise, it also affects the youngsters like and they become an obsessive person they follow a wrong path as well as, a correct path it depends on youngsters. Parents should look up to their children’s and Medias have to reduce the promoting of the film stars activities.

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Average: 8.1 (10 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, likewise, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 5.60731707317 517% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 965.302439024 146% => OK
No of words: 284.0 196.424390244 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96478873239 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 3.73543355544 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62208359071 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485915492958 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 422.1 283.868780488 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.2009033341 43.030603864 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9333333333 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.86666666667 5.23603664747 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310257529988 0.215688989381 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128946826817 0.103423049105 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142052200331 0.0843802449381 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225678095766 0.15604864568 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106658850744 0.0819641961636 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 40.7170731707 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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