The table below shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.

Essay topics:

The table below shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.

Given is the table illustrating the global mobile phone sales between 2005 and 2006.

It is clear from the table that people splashed out on Nokia in both years. By contrast, BenQ Mobile was the category receiving the least expenditure during the period.

On the market, Nokia was the brand name which was consumed the most, at 32.5% in 2005 and at 35% in 2006, while, Motorola was significantly lower, at 17.7% and 21.1% respectively. Samsung accounted for 12.7% in 2005 which was higher than 11.8% in 2006.

A notable fact is that Sony Ericsson and L.G were not remarkable by occupying not over 8% during two years. However, BenQ Mobile was the smallest proportion; it made up 4.9% in 2005 and had a slight lull to 2.4% of the total products and in comparison with the high ones of the “others” that witnessed a slight decrease of 19.2% to 3%.

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Average: 6 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 714.0 965.302439024 74% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69736842105 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49778295046 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.631578947368 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 197.1 283.868780488 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.239477459 43.030603864 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 5.23603664747 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19513357047 0.215688989381 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872194235764 0.103423049105 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770363553562 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122558002574 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819291117902 0.0819641961636 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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