The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010 | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The maps elucidate the significant changes to path enabling an urban hospital , over a span of three years, from 2007 to 2010.

Overall, the maps highlight the principal developments made to the paths all the way from city road to healthcare service building. Similarly, infrastructure and amenities increased along with roadway modifications.

At the beginning of the period, in 2007, the city hospital was enclosed by a ring road. The hospital road in the south allowed access for bus stops on either side. Moreover, to the east of the building, a car park was located for both staff and public. The city road runs all the way from east to west.

However, with spectacular changes made over a three-year period, for the healthcare mansion, two new roundabout roads were constructed on the southern part. To the west of the hospital main pathway, a spacious bus station was erected by demolishing old bus transport areas. In the center, the one-way hospital road connected both circular pavements. The bus stops to the eastern-face of hospital street were knocked down to make way for the expansion of the original car park to only staff in the south , while a new space was created for the public beside the hospital in the east.

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...anges to path enabling an urban hospital , over a span of three years, from 2007 t...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... runs all the way from east to west. However, with spectacular changes made o...
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Line 9, column 503, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...inal car park to only staff in the south , while a new space was created for the p...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lic beside the hospital in the east.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, similarly, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1042.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98564593301 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74208196436 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.279660519 43.030603864 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7272727273 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 5.23603664747 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278867689672 0.215688989381 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10795634312 0.103423049105 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077066511211 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168253152555 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05388932274 0.0819641961636 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, similarly, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments