The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2019 and 2020

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2019 and 2020.

The change in online retail sales in four different sectors in Canada during 2 years since 2019 is demonstrated by charts, shown in percentages.

Overall, it is essential to notice that the two figures which experienced a decrease related to clothes and house stuff, and others revealed the opposite trend throughout the time scale
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As per data, in the initial year, the best-seller products in those nations by accessing the internet were observed in clothing, with virtually two-fifths sold, then it declined significantly to 22% in the next period. If the groceries purchases compared to the former in 2020, even though the proportion would incline, that only reached the rate as much as the previous counterpart.

Meanwhile, household supplies including kitchen tools commenced to stand out to be the second one sold at most, being greater than electrical one, a gap of one in tenth. The latter, furthermore, ascended dramatically to be the leader in the last period more than twice, while domestic appliances witnessed a descend at 11%.

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Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...pposite trend throughout the time scale . As per data, in the initial year, the ...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ce, while domestic appliances witnessed a descend at 11%.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, second, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 885.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23668639053 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86808593927 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.739644970414 0.547539520022 135% => OK
syllable_count: 262.8 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 24.4517665801 43.030603864 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 147.5 112.824112599 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1666666667 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.23603664747 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12343567451 0.215688989381 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580063545461 0.103423049105 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884589813844 0.0843802449381 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.082400659633 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0999372162386 0.0819641961636 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.2329268293 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 61.2550243902 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 11.4140731707 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.35 8.06136585366 128% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 40.7170731707 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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