The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010

The two pie charts compare the percentages of internet sales on various retail products in Canada in two years, 2005 and 2010.

We can see that the most significant feature is that electronics and appliance, which was the highest sell sector in 2005. Its percentage decreased from 35% to 30% in 2010. Likewise, Likewise, the food and beverage figure substantial rose 10%, compared with the figure in 2005.

However, the percentages of the online sales of the other sectors decreased. The most dramatic fall was in the home furnishings retail sector. While this figure was 25% of the total online sales of these four sectors in 2005, it fell to just 15% in 2010. There was also a decrease in the electronics and appliances sector, which saw a fall from 35% in 2005 to 30% in 2010.

In summary, the proportion of online sales for each of the four sectors changed significantly from 2005 to 2010. While the figures for food and beverage and video games increased, the figures for other sectors decreased.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, likewise, so, while, in summary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 173.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85549132948 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57624552344 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514450867052 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 243.0 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.8372703814 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.0 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39197283133 0.215688989381 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160103601382 0.103423049105 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113264391312 0.0843802449381 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260490394131 0.15604864568 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115699882333 0.0819641961636 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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