You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The illustrations show how chocolate is produced Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The illustrations show how chocolate is produced.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The manufacturing diagrams of the process of producing liquid chocolate made from cocoa beans.

Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that there are 3 main stages beginning with growing and harvesting cocoa beans from S.America Africa, Indonesia, followed by the manufacturing process and finishing with producing new products.

Starting with growing cocoa beans from S.America Africa, Indonesia, then it is podded from outside to harvest the beans with a specialized crescent knife. In the next stage, cocoa beans are brewed by placing them between two banana leaves. This step makes it easier to ferment. The beans are divided in the sun for many hours. Subsequently, before transporting by train or lorry, it is put in large sacks on a scale to divide the weight equally.

At the subsequent stage of the process, after taking to the factory, beans are placed in a specialized machine to roast at high temperatures. Before being crushed in a grinder so that the outer shell can be removed. Finally, take the inner part of the beans and press them into liquid chocolate.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...iquid chocolate made from cocoa beans. Looking from an overall perspective, it ...
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Suggestion: America
...owing and harvesting cocoa beans from S.America Africa, Indonesia, followed by the manu...
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...finishing with producing new products. Starting with growing cocoa beans from S...
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...tarting with growing cocoa beans from S.America Africa, Indonesia, then it is podded fr...
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... a scale to divide the weight equally. At the subsequent stage of the process, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, look, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 929.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16111111111 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74704667454 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622222222222 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.8405380992 43.030603864 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7 5.23603664747 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0512849193081 0.215688989381 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0247507525264 0.103423049105 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033597412818 0.0843802449381 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0383868881971 0.15604864568 25% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159418563857 0.0819641961636 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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