Young people should spend more time on cultural activities such as music or theatre nd less time on sport. How far do you agree with this statement.
It is sometimes argued that young people should spend their time on cultural activities such as music, flim or theatre. However, other people think that playing sport is better for young people. In my opinion, both culture and sports are significant parts of life so young people should do a mixture of both.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that cultural activities are good for the health of the mind and spirit. Besides, it allow young people to be cretive and experience diffrent worlds such as learning about culture, customs or languages from other countries. Furthermore, when people go to the theatre, they can learn a musical instrument can be more experience. Nevertheless, sports activities can be less experience but it can good for the health. Sports gives young people the chance to exercise, which is important for health reasons. In addition, sports also teaches young people about rules and teamwork. For example, if you take part in a sport team, solidarity will help you win every opponent.
On the one hand, if you do only one type of activity, just sport activitites or cultural activities can be bad. For instance, many young people concentrate on one activity in order to become the best, like young sport stars. This can put a lot of pressure on them and make them less interesting than someone who does a variety of things.
In conclusion, I believe that young people should have the chance to do a variety of activities and that a balance of sport and cultural activities is best.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'allows'?
Suggestion: allows
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 19.0 5.60731707317 339% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1253.0 965.302439024 130% => OK
No of words: 259.0 196.424390244 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83783783784 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61647899744 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 106.607317073 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 283.868780488 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.8348912483 43.030603864 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.5 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 5.23603664747 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359570693288 0.215688989381 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132516857964 0.103423049105 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832176885051 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244453001626 0.15604864568 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675996494675 0.0819641961636 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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